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Cipher⁉️✨✨'s avatar

I haven’t really seen a lot of people do a metric variation of free verse poetry as short as this, and it’s wonderful!! I might just have to go write some myself :)

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

oooh i’m glad i could be of some inspiration!! i typically write poems short in length, but i LOVE the freedom of experimenting with different styles and variations ໒꒱

xo, dom 🤍's avatar

Im just now getting into poetry after swearing it off! This is enjoyed!

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

I'm so glad to hear that you're getting back into it!! Poetry really is so beautiful, especially when you find works that speak to you. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem-- it truly is so appreciated ໒꒱

⊱❀ hana ❀⊰'s avatar

"woman claws shred girl dreams once held dear" wowowowowow 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

AHHH I'm so glad you connected with this line!! (personally, it's my favorite of the whole piece hehe) ໒꒱

Monica's avatar

I love it!!

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

thank you so much!! i really appreciate you taking the time to comment and support my piece. it means a lot ໒꒱

May's avatar

you say so much in such few words, absolutely lovely

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

thank you!! i try to make sure all of my poems aren't too lengthy, but leave readers with a lingering impact and emotions (positive or negative) all the same!! thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my work!! words like yours truly make my entire day ໒꒱

Naked Under The Coat's avatar

I love it!

It’s raw and unsettling in the best way. The contrast between the girl and the woman is clear and brutal, and the images are sharp without being overdone. It feels intimate, honest, and hard to forget.

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

i'm so glad to hear that you've connected with it!! i'm glad that the contrast was clear (i was actually a little bit nervous it wouldn't be). comments like this really encourage me to continue with my journey in poetry-- so i am more grateful for your kind words than i could ever truly express ໒꒱

Your girl's avatar

Loved it, Rachel! Realising that who you’ve become might’ve scared your younger self is such a difficult thing to sit with, not because we did anything wrong. It’s just that growing up changes us in ways we couldn’t have imagined, and you paint it so well with the monster underneath the bed<3

Rachael Diane ໒꒱'s avatar

This means the world to me!! Thank you so much for taking the time out of your day to comment on my work. I'm so glad you connected with the concept of the piece. It truly means so much!! ໒꒱